托福写作高分必备策略
想要提高托福写作分数,你得掌握好方法,并且把方法运用在写作上,背好单词。备下模板,在考试的时候一击即中。现在小编就给大家分享一些托福写作高分必备策略。
托福写作高分你得这么做!
写作高分必备:
1.教师指导写作高分技巧
2.不断实践高分技巧
3.教师指点修改
技巧
1.学会快速审题-根据题干,判断题型,决定解题方式.
2.学会快速展开文章结构-具体包括开头段,论点,让步段,结尾段的具体展开技巧和语言点.
3.学会多样化展开中间段部分-学会写例子,细节,重逻辑串联,忌细节堆砌.
修改
写作高分,除了以上所提到的掌握技巧意外,另外需要的是各位宝宝们的不断践行;对于基础一般的同学一开始的过程会被骂的狗血淋头,因为文章惨不忍睹;等作文能够稳定24分左右以后;你所需要做的事情就是将那些写的已经能看的作文,通过教师指导修改成一篇真正的高分文章,最后一步嘛;当然就是背背背啦!这可比漫无目的的去背诵各式各样的范文提升的要快的多;因为你所背诵的文章思路是你自己的,大部分的语言组织也是你自己的。
下面就向各位宝宝们展示下什么叫做一篇投入心血的精心批改(黄色为题目;黑色为未批改的作文;红色为批改和建议部分;蓝色为整体评语);
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Environmental issues can be solved or improved in the future. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
文章优势:观点鲜明,结构明确,有例子和细节,语言表达尚可
需要改进的地方: 1.小语法错误 2.语言表达比较啰嗦 3.逻辑上很多地方不准确 4.致命伤:中间段2论点不切题, 段落内的论证逻辑不清晰。
这篇文章企图从两个角度论证环境会变好:
1.现在全球政府已经意识到,且开始行动- 第一段主体段逻辑没有问题
2.普通人的意识也正在逐渐养成。- 第二段主题段论点不扣题- 不应该表达:提出环境保护意识是有效的措施。而应该表达为: 跟过去比起来,现在的人们已经养成了保护环境的意识。 言下之意,就是现在和将来的人们会主动的去保护环境。
Some people consider that environmental problems can be more awful in the future for they believe that the more advent technology, the more pollution will come out(想表达科技越先进,污染问题越多 应该改为, the more advanced the technology is, the more environmental problems would pop up).(建议整个句子修改为:In today’s society, many people consider the environment problems could be more awful in the future for the advent of more technological products like the automobile would lead to more serious environmental contamination) However, I believe that environment will be better tomorrow because the every country of the world have been going to take action to face the circumstance issues and human have recognized the importance of protecting surroundings as time goes on(去掉the, 谓语动词三单,介词of改为the 时态改为完成式即可——- because every country in the world has prepared to take action to resolve environmental issue and the public has already recognized the importance of environmental conservation as time goes by ).
To begin with, environmental issues have become a major matter of concern for a number of countries. (添加过渡性短语- In this way,) This fact has led them to come up with many measures to solve the environmental problems(去掉后面的the 即 solve environmental problems). For instance, The United Nations Climate Change conference which about 192 countries attended was held in 2009, it aimed to discuss and put forward acts to cope with climatic change problems(第一个专有名词后面从句改为:The United Nations Climate Change conference attended by 192 countries was held in 2009 with the collective goal, that is, coping with the issue of climate change). There is no doubt that(少用套句,改为: Undoubtedly,) it has good impact on the tendency of changing climate on the Earth(这句话语言表达和上一句有重复且时态表达有问题 改为: the conference was a good start symbolizing the cooperation of the whole world to address environmental issue). And this is a know as‘ save the human last chance ’of the meeting(不要另起一句,直接and并列句 即改为: … and it was known as a meeting of last chance to salvage human beings). Furthermore, more and more solar cars are produced, which are made to save energy to protect environment(furthermore表示递进or并列此处逻辑上不是很强, 改为:as a consequence, the number of solar vehicles has experienced a dramatic increase. ). In a word, all of the actions are in order to prevent our Earth from destroying( in order to如此用绝对的中式英文,且总结的句子表达出来的意思并不能帮忙总结这个段落,应该与论点呼应,表达出的大致意义应该是:因此可以看出,全球已经意识到环境问题,且政府以及采取了很多行动, 与下一段形成呼应 下一段应该以“普通人也养成了保护环境得意时”。 所以应该改成: In a word, governments throughout the world have reached an agreement to protect the environment and taken immediate effective and potent measures to avert continual environmental deterioration).
In addition, raising environmental awareness can be an effective method to prevent and control pollution(论点扣题,应该改为: In addition, current individuals have already cultivated the awareness of environmental preservation and contributed a lot to environmental protection). In contemporary society (in the …), many more people are concern about the environmental situation (are concerned about/ current environmental situation) . Another example of Beijing, which used to be an auto-dependent city, Shrouded by smothering smog for years, residents in Beijing have totally realized the severe consequences brought by heavy smog and are fully motivated to reduce the number of private cars, burn clean fuels and lead a low-carbon life (句子主干结构应该是:北京被雾霾笼罩很多年,因此北京人知道了后果,开始被激励去减少适用私家车,燃烧干净能源,过低碳生活。 首先逻辑上:这句话的中文实际就不是很扣论点,应该改为,北京人意识到雾霾的后果,开始养成了后续的这些习惯。 其次语言上: 北京被雾霾笼罩缺乏谓语。 建议整句话改为;Since citizens in Beijing shrouded by smothering smog for years realize the severe consequences of environmental pollution, they have gradually developed the habit of reducing the frequency of driving private cars, burning clean fuels and leading a low-carbon life). Therefore, government are required to offer more courses, videos and reports useful for raising public awareness on environmental protection in order to create a pleasant ecological environment with cleaner air(这句话的逻辑不通, 作者观点环境未来会变好, 这段的论证思路是; 普通人意识到保护环境-例子;北京人受到雾霾影响,因此改变了习惯。 接下来不应该说因此, 政府需要去提供更多课。 作者应该这样去表达, 与此同时,现在的政府也会去做一些事情去加强人们的意识。所以这句应该改为: Meanwhile, the government also endeavors to strengthen people’s awareness of environmental protection by offering more public courses and related educational TV programs to create a favorable ecological environment). The example shows that our environmental circumstances will gradually get better(总结句依然不扣题,应该改为,因此可以看出,现在普通人的行为已经发生了改变,他们的环保意识有利于将来环境质量的提升。所以表达为: Apparently, the behavior of common people has been changed and their strong consciousness of environmental protection is beneficial to the improvement of future environmental quality).
All in all, our environment will get better tomorrow. I feel hopeful that many more countries is going to take steps to face the environmental problems and more and more people have consciousness on the environmental protection. (小语法错误,另外句子不够精炼,谓语动词三单,is-are。 整句建议改为; the efforts made by both the worldwide governments and ordinary individuals can explain why I am convinced that environment in the near future will be improved. )
避免托福写作五大错误开头
一:中式英文人见人晕
典型失败案例:Topic 1-The happiest moment in your life
In our life, there are always some moments which make your heart flower opened angrily……
Topic 2- The population problem
The population problem is a very big problem。 For example, in the city centers of Shanghai, we can always see people mountain people sea there。
Topic3- Is there fairness in today’s business world?
I think in today’s society, there is no fairness in the business world。 For example, I always chopped when I go out buy things……
Topic 4- The advantage of being a nice person
Being a nice person have many advantage。 I believe if a people always do bad things, he will get “baoying”。
二:废话连篇不知所云
典型失败案例: Topic 1-Should college students be allowed to get married?
This topic is very interesting。 I’m very interested in talking about this topic。 Because I’m also a college student and I’m not married……
修改方案:开门见山 直奔主题
In my opinion, it would not be a wise decision to allow college students to get married。
Topic 2-Will modern technology, such as the Internet, ever replace the book or the writing word as the sole source of information?
Ok, this topic is a very good topic。 First, let me tell you a story: I have a friend, he likes go on the internet very much。 Every day, he uses internet to read news or play internet games。 So we can see the internet is more and more important in our daily life。
Topic 3-The importance of environmental protection
Oh, this topic is surely very important。 Isn’t it? Of course! It’s really very very important!
三:语法错误惨不忍睹
典型失败案例:Topic-If children behave badly, should their parents accept responsibility and also be punished?
About this problem, my think is if children behave badly, then parents are not right。 Because teach child is parent’s responsibility。 So we also punish parents too besides children is also should。
四:观点模糊态度暧昧
典型失败案例: Topic-Should college students be allowed to get married?
I think this topic is very hard to say。 Because I am still very little, only 17, and not married, so this topic is very difficult for me……
五:偏离主题无轨电车
典型失败案例:Topic-It is said that nowadays one can not acquire the qualifications and quality essential to success through university education。 To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?
I think to success, we must have a lot of important qualities。 To have these important qualities, we must learn a lot of things, for example, English, music tools, and etc。 We can learn these qualities from our teachers, our friends and from books。 All in all, we can learn from many places。
托福写作备考策略之独立话题
选取2016年9月独立机经部分题目
1.Somestudents prefer to have their final grades determined by numerous small assignments, whereas others prefer to have their grades determined by only afew large ones. Which do you prefer and why?
2.An effective leader tries to make others feel they are parts of a decision.
3.If a city has an amount of money, which option listed in the following do you prefer?
Build a public garden to provide quiet environment to benefit all
Build a sports field for students in high school which doesn’t have its own.
4.Governmenthas done enough to educate people the importance of a balanced lifestyle and healthy eating.
5.In the past,people were more interested in improving their neighborhoods than they are today.
6.In the past,young people depended on their parents for making decisions. Today young people are better able to make decisions on their own.
7.It is better to relax by watching TV or reading a book than by doing physical exercises.
8.We should state our honest opinions even though people may disagree with us.
9.In order to succeed in a new job, the ability to adapt oneself to the new environment ismore important than excellent knowledge.
10.People spend too much time communication through social media and text messages.
11.There is noreason to be rude to another person.
12.Technology designed to make people’s life simpler in fact make peoples life morecomplicated.
13.Movies andTV programs made in your own country are more interesting compared to moviesand programs made in other countries.
14.It is as important for older people to study and lean new things as it is for youngpeople.
15.To remain happy and optimistic whenever you fail is more important than to achieve success.
16.It is important to know what is happening around the world, even if it does not affect your personal life.
实用方法介绍
丨1.常用论点/理由
针对独立写作的常见话题,大致可归成三类:个人类(关于学习、工作、休闲、做人的选择);古今类(题目中有明显的now… past … 让考生判断现在和过去在某一方面的比较);决策类(题目中通常有government这个词出现,讨论政府的投资或者政策,有些题目虽然没有government这个词出现,但如果涉及的是有社会影响力的话题,也可以划为政府类,比如 A/D Professional athletes such as the football playerand basketball player deserve high salaries that they are paid.)
1)个人类常用理由
学知识、练技能、拓展视野……..
工作机会、赚钱…….
交朋友、陪伴家人……. (合作、沟通) …….
身体健康、放松心情…….
省时间、省钱、省精力………..
2)古今类常用理由
现代社会的优点:
教育: 先进全面鼓励个性
工作:种类丰富机会多
医疗:治愈缓解更多疾病
技术:网络电子产品汽车
公共设施:便利的交通娱乐购物餐饮
法律制度:保障个人权利
媒体:揭露真相传播信息
人与人:互动频繁、方便
经济进步:更充裕的钱和无助
世界和平:更少的战争伤亡
现代社会的缺点:
环境问题(污染,能源消耗)
生活压力(学习,工作)
欺骗敲诈
3)决策类常用思路
注:除了使用个人类常用理由,针对决策类这种和政府相关有社会影响力的题目,建议多角度讨论,一下是常见的讨论角度:
1.大众 individuals
对我们有什么用?(放松健康省钱知识关系等等)
是不是我们每个人都需要的?(大多数/ 小众)
2. 相关群体relativegroups
题目中谈论到的比如artists,scientists, athletes 等等
3. 企业companies
企业有钱,可以代替政府去投资有利可图的领域
4. 社会 Society
Economy(tourism), culture, safety, improvement …
丨2.对比段
通常来说,托福独立写作的论证写3段,上文介绍了最基本的常用理由,但有时候,因为各种原因只想出2个理由的时候,可以写一段对比段,即把对比论证写一段。
具体案例参考第三部分的机经详解
丨3.让步段
除了对比段之外,让步段也可以解决只有2个理由缺少第三个段落的问题。
具体案例参考第三部分的机经详解
丨4.拆分法/分情况讨论
针对一些比较抽象的独立写作话题,我们可以分情况讨论,或者对于关键词进行定义和拆分,在更加具体的情况下方便论证。
具体案例参考第三部分的机经详解
丨5.检验论点
没有标准答案,这是独立解题最自由的地方。但这并不意味着什么样的理由都可以作为论点并且展开段落的。课堂上,一些学生可以马上相处三个理由,但仔细探究,可能只有一个理由是可以作为论点的。
这里说一下三个检验标准:1.支持观点 2. 论点相互不重叠 3. 易于展开
丨6.灵活调整
根据ETS的出题,我们知道,题目是千变万化的,为了帮助学生更好的应对,老师们会总结出一些实用方法,对学生来说,比死记硬别、生搬硬套更重要的是,在题目的练习中,去运用这些方法,并且灵活的调整。
如果觉得一些常用理由不适合支持某一道题,那么就放弃这个理由;
如果只想出两个理由,那么可以加一个让步段或者对比段;
如果一道题直接用常用理由去支持很难,可以试着拆分法;
如果完全同意/不同意很难,可以试着两边倒;
如果题目中有绝对词,可以部分同意/不同意。
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实用方法在题目中的具体运用
使用第一部分的9月机经部分题目
1.Some students prefer to havetheir final grades determined by numerous small assignments, whereas othersprefer to have their grades determined by only a few large ones. Which do youprefer and why?
观点:small assignments
论点1:轻松
论点2:知识(学生复习;老师备课)
论点3:对比段/让步段
2.An effectiveleader tries to make others feel they are parts of a decision.
观点:agree
论点1:来自领导的尊重要员工更快乐积极
论点2:员工的参与促进想法的完善
论点3:对比段
3.If a city has an amount ofmoney, which option listed in the following do you prefer?
1)Build a publicgarden to provide quiet environment to benefit all
2)Build asports field for students in high school which doesn’t have its own.
版本A:
观点:选1)
论点1:relaxing
论点2:used byeveryone
论点3:让步段(承认2的好处指出显著缺点即优惠了一小部分人不公平)
版本B:
观点:选2)
论点1:healthy
论点2:mentality
论点3:补充建议(允许周末开放给市民)
4.Governmenthas done enough to educate people the importance of a balanced lifestyle andhealthy eating.
观点:Disagree
论点1: knowledge 宣传健康饮食的知识( 课程广告 )
论点2: pressure 减少学习和工作压力
论点3: money 建设更多更便宜的运动场所减轻人们的经济负担
注:这道题,用个人类的常用理由就可以解决,那么久不用多角度思考了~
5.In the past,people were more interested in improving their neighborhoods than they aretoday.
观点:Disagree
论点1:经济进步大家有时间和精力改善社区
论点2:沟通方便更好的解决社区问题
论点3:普遍受过教育有能力解决问题
注:三个古今类的常用理由,现代社会的优点
6.In the past, young people depended ontheir parents for making decisions. Today young people are better able to makedecisions on their own.
观点:Agree
论点1:Internet –丰富信息
论点2:Education – 培养独立
论点3:对比段
7.It is betterto relax by watching TV or reading a book than by doing physical exercises.
版本A:
观点:Physical exercise
论点1:health
论点2:cooperation
论点3:make friends
论点4:release pressure
论点5:让步段/对比段
注:有些题目,可以相处很多个有效论点,那就选择自己觉得好写的展开~
版本B:
观点:TV book
论点1:convenience;
论点2:knowledge andinspiration
论点3:让步段/对比段
8.We shouldstate our honest opinions even though people may disagree with us.
观点:agree
论点1:家庭
论点2:朋友
论点3:学习/工作
注:用拆分法解这道题,即把说实话放在生活中的三大场景下,便于进行具体论证
9.In order tosucceed in a new job, the ability to adapt oneself to the new environment ismore important than excellent knowledge.
版本A:
观点:Bothimportant
论点1:知识– 独立解决问题&自信
论点2:适应能力–效率&轻松
注:两边倒的题目,两个支持对象的各写一段,每一段设立有1-2个小论点,这样不用担心字数~
版本B:
观点:Agree
论点1:get alongwith different people
论点2:learn newknowledge
论点3:adjustmentality
注:对适应能力进行拆分,解读成和不同的人相处的能力、学习新知识的能力、调整心态的能力,这些都比固有的接触知识更重要,因为,世界一直在变啊~
10.Peoplespend too much time communication through social media and text messages.
观点:Disagree
论点1:Relaxing
论点2:Improvefriendship
论点3: Learning
11.There is noreason to be rude to another person.
版本1:Agree 常用理由 -mood - efficiency - opportunity
版本2:Agree 拆分法- 家庭礼貌- 工作礼貌 - 社交礼貌
12.Technologydesigned to make people’s life simpler in fact make peoples life morecomplicated.
agree
1) car –traffic jam; air pollution
2) internet – too much information to handle; false and misleading
3) digital devices – distraction (music; games; chat; online shopping)
注:把technology 拆分成三个主要方面,汽车、互联网、电子设备
13.Movies andTV programs made in your own country are more interesting compared to movies andprograms made in other countries.
观点:both interesting
Own country:1 共鸣理解2 喜欢的演员
Foreign country:1拓展视野2精彩的画面
14.It is asimportant for older people to study and lean new things as it is for youngpeople.
Agree
版本1:拆分法(对学习新知识诠释)
1 学习健康知识
2 培养爱好
3 学习使用电脑上网
版本2:常用理由
1 mentalhealth
2improve convenience
3communication with young people
15.To remainhappy and optimistic whenever you fail is more important than to achievesuccess.
Agree
1)mentalhealth
2)stimulateimprovement
3 )让步段(承认成功是可喜的但是生活的常态就是一直失败、努力、克服苦难、获得成功,也就是说,成功是个结果,那么占据生活主要的是那个过程,所以为了健康以及持久的成功,乐观积极更重要)
16.It is importantto know what is happening around the world, even if it does not affect yourpersonal life.
Agree
版本1:常用理由
1)relaxing
2)knowledge
3)communication
版本2:拆分法
1)medicalnews – health
2)political news – safety
3)economic news – money
托福写作技巧
1.在托福写作的直接引语中,句首字母要大写。例如:“Then,”I said,“You havebeen making a mistake,and the letter is not in the apartment。”“那么,”我说,“你准弄错了,这封信并不在那栋房子里。”
2.星期、月份名称的第一个字母要大写,但季节第一个字母不大写。例如:Sunday星期天,August八月,winter冬天,spring春天。
3.一些大型节日名称的第一个实词的第一字母都要大写。如:Children's Day儿童节,National Day国庆节, Teachers' Day教师节。
4.由普通名词构成的专有名词词组,除其中的冠词、较短的介词和连词外,每个词的第一字母都要大写。例如:the Great Wall长城,the United States美国。
5.大型会议、文件、条约名称的每个实词(虚词:副词、介词、连词、助词、叹词和拟声词则不用大写)的第一个字母都要大写。书名、报刊名应大写首字母,文章标题中的每一个实词的第一个字母要大写。如:China Daily《中国日报》,New York Times《纽约时报》,Their Class《他们的班级》(文章标题),the Warsaw Treaty《华沙条约》,实例:English Coaching Paper《英语辅导报》。
6.托福作文中的诗歌每一行的第一个单词的第一个字母要大写。
7. 表示称呼语或职务的词首字母要大写。实例:Mr Green格林先生, Dr Lee李博士。
8.大多数的缩略词要大写。实例:CCTV(中国中央电视台), ID(身份证), CD(光盘)。
9.句子开头的第一个字母要大写。“I(我)”在句中任何位置都要大写。例如:What's her name?Mary and I are teachers。
10.地名、国名和人名等专有名词第一个字母要大写。例如:Russia(俄罗斯),Youyang(酉阳),Chengdu(成都),Jack(杰克)。
11.一些亲属关系(如mother,sister,mum,dad等)用作称呼语时第一个字母要大写。例如:Thank you,Granny。谢谢你,姥姥。
12.人名前的称呼或头衔第一个字母应大写。例如:Mr Smith,Dr Wang,Miss Mary。
13.表示语种、民族的名词或形容词第一个字母要大写。例如:Russian俄语、俄罗斯人(的),Chinese汉语、中国人(的)。
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